Fangala the Flying Feline

Very sweet. I agree with everybody that you could expand on this; maybe you could change it into a series of short stories? But not only that--this part can be ...

Wow, dark. I'm glad she doesn't die; that would be really awful. This was very well-written and gripping, and my only suggestion is more concrete detail and less direct exposition. ...

Thanks for the reviews, everyone! To answer your questions, this is not about vampires (although I do have a vampire poem floating somewhere in my piles of notebooks), but it ...

This is the fleshed-out version of "Horsefeathers", a bare-bones story I posted sometime last year. You don't need to read the original first. Well, enjoy! Grace flicked the switch, but ...

Hurray, I'm back! Sorry I haven't posted anything for ages, but now that I've finally returned, guess who's the first person's portfolio I check? That's right, BBB, it's yours! Now, ...

Sweet. I agree that it's a bit short, and I'm not sure I like the rhyme at the end. This might go over better if it was free verse, since ...

I could never know what I never learned; I could never ache where I never burned. I could never lust if we hadn't met and now I'll never ever forget ...

Author's Note: The following poem does not represent my personal religious beliefs, nor am I preaching about flying bunnies. God is the biggest noun there is! God is Icarus Quasar, ...

Pretty nice. You do say "hole" a lot, though. I'm sure you can find another word for that. Also, the first few verses are repetitive. Like: "I am in a ...

Wow, thanks for all the wonderful crits! :D And BBB, to answer your question: yes, this poem does have a point. A rather mundane one, may I add (just to ...

Safety comes from distance, clearly. Someone lock me in isolation-- blind me, bind me, cut me, find me breaking in icewater perspiration. Set like stones in hazel cement, my pupils ...

Hi, there. Okay, I agree with cat4prowl about your info-dumpish first part. It would be much better if you started off with an action scene. As is, it resembles an ...

AAAAAGGGGGHHHHHH! Why is this post so short? Write more! Sorry, I got a little carried away there. Anyway, this is good...very good. Dumb librarian sub. :D I'll be looking out ...

Ah...very good. Overall, great job writing as a girl. However, can I beg you to change Brittany's name? Oh God...that name makes me gag. No offense to anyone with that ...

Ha, this was marvelous! I have such a great mental picture of your narrator (singer?), like he's going completely insane. That's what crazy people do--they focus on something unimportant, but ...